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I used to want you
need you
eat you
breath you
but now i dont even call

to tell you im late
and you wait
and you wait
then force a smile
when i stumble home

lies staining the air
you don't even yell
you sit
and sit
and watch me drink more

your tears fill me
not with remorse
but with anger
because you're acting
so weak

fight back!
scream yell
curse me
don't just let me
walk all over your heart

im angry with you
for not being angry at me
im angry cause im
so weak
so weak
©2009-2010 ~jamielikewhoa
:iconjamielikewhoa:

Author's Comments

Ignore bad punctuation, etc, it's supposed to be that way.

Take it as you please, crit if you like.

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:icon3wyl:
I like the rhythm here. At the beginning, breathe is missing an e, but overall, the way you've written this piece is brilliant. :D

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